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McNeal
Number of posts: 138
Age: 32
Location: Monrovia, Liberia
Say Whatever: The opposing wind, like a kite, will take me higher
My Mood: 
Points: 15
Registration date: 2008-05-01
 | | Subject: A poem from my notebook Wed Jun 04, 2008 10:28 pm | |
| Maybe I would love critiques for this one. It's very old too:
I Wrestle Against Myself
I tried turning away from myself
But saw me looking at myself
I tried taking away the old stuffs off my shelf
But knew it was a wrestle against myself
How could I remove my ancient sleeve
And put me on a new amour of serenity?
How could I change when I don’t even believe
And then wrestle against my own integrity?
I cried out aloud from within
Only to put all that I feel out
Looking unto a future so thin
I still hope to wrestle me out
Wrestle against my failures,
Wrestle against my ado,
Wrestle against my future, I verge to wrestle against my ego-McNeal (1999) |
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Geyla Queen
Admin
Number of posts: 6440
Age: 34
Location: Atlanta, GA
Say Whatever: I'm still holding on.
My Mood: 
Points: 4298
Registration date: 2008-03-28
| | Subject: Re: A poem from my notebook Wed Jun 04, 2008 10:35 pm | |
|  nice...we have another poet in dey village
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The More I Know....The More I Know I Need To Know"
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candygirl
Admin
Number of posts: 5911
Location: Monrovia, Liberia
Say Whatever: Laughter is the best medicine
My Mood: 
Points: 2226
Registration date: 2008-03-31
| | Subject: Re: A poem from my notebook Wed Jun 04, 2008 10:50 pm | |
| Wow mcNeal.. really nice.. i love it. i give it 4 stars  this was written a few years back.. do you still feel that way...? if you were speaking of yourself, that is
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For how can love attain true appreciation
if it has never weathered tribulation?
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McNeal
Number of posts: 138
Age: 32
Location: Monrovia, Liberia
Say Whatever: The opposing wind, like a kite, will take me higher
My Mood:
Points: 15
Registration date: 2008-05-01
| | Subject: Re: A poem from my notebook Thu Jun 05, 2008 12:18 am | |
| To be honest, it was a though time for me and those moments of perturbation, many thoughts run thru' your mind...but at the moment... I think the wrestle is done, and I am won..!
But my anticipation was more of the negative, neanmoins, it's ok.
I will be doing more posting as I get more reviews... I have more of them. |
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RossWorld
Number of posts: 644
Location: Jersey City, NJ
Say Whatever: "An Ass, having put on the Lion's skin, roamed about in the Forest, and amused himself"
My Mood: 
Points: 65
Registration date: 2008-04-26
| | Subject: Re: A poem from my notebook Thu Jun 05, 2008 1:03 am | |
| CG McNeal dat my boy...u know nah.. so so nice people I can roll with.
Welcome McNeal |
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LadyFlo
Number of posts: 2224
Location: Decatur, GA
Say Whatever: Luv me as I am cuz u can't be me and I can't and don't wanna be u!
My Mood:
Points: 213
Registration date: 2008-04-22
| | Subject: Re: A poem from my notebook Thu Jun 05, 2008 1:27 am | |
| | RossWorld wrote: | CG McNeal dat my boy...u know nah.. so so nice people I can roll with.
Welcome McNeal |
yeah the poem is well written.. but Ross you gotta claim ownership on this one too ehn..?  |
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McNeal
Number of posts: 138
Age: 32
Location: Monrovia, Liberia
Say Whatever: The opposing wind, like a kite, will take me higher
My Mood:
Points: 15
Registration date: 2008-05-01
| | Subject: Re: A poem from my notebook Thu Jun 05, 2008 3:08 pm | |
| But if you na identify with good thing then who you be na? |
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